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Post by Toni on Feb 8, 2009 0:16:31 GMT -5
summary My name is Jessica. I'm seventeen years old. I was locked away for life five years ago. You are a reader, and you are about to experience exactly what my life was like. I'm warning you to turn back now. No mind was meant to comprehend what is hidden inside the pages of this story. Remember that you have been warned, do you wish to continue?
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Post by Shadow on Feb 8, 2009 0:18:02 GMT -5
Good, so far =)
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Post by Toni on Feb 8, 2009 21:12:52 GMT -5
Thanks.. I'm gonna re-make it
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Post by Shadow on Feb 8, 2009 21:20:13 GMT -5
Alot better! =D
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Post by Toni on Feb 8, 2009 21:21:48 GMT -5
Thanks ;D
Do you have any suggestions? I NEED CRITISISM!!!!!!
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Post by Shadow on Feb 8, 2009 21:23:21 GMT -5
No suggestions, just continue and then read through what you wrote a few times and make corrections =D
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Post by Toni on Feb 8, 2009 21:24:06 GMT -5
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Post by Shadow on Feb 8, 2009 21:57:32 GMT -5
You use big words that a mind like mine cannot understand
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Post by Toni on Feb 8, 2009 21:58:24 GMT -5
Such as..
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Post by Shadow on Feb 8, 2009 22:00:12 GMT -5
Comprehend heheh..
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Post by Toni on Feb 8, 2009 22:04:03 GMT -5
That's funny, becuse comprehend translates to understand
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Post by Shadow on Feb 9, 2009 15:04:15 GMT -5
Oh xD
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